From Rachel Kushner, The Flamethrowers:
I realized I’d been wrong. She was not the pedigreed rich. He was and she was not. Sometimes all the information is there in the first five minutes, laid out for inspection. Then it goes away, gets suppressed as a matter of pragmatism. It’s too much to know a lot about strangers. But some don’t end up strangers. They end up closer, and you had your five minutes to see what they were really like and you missed it.
This is great! My one question is about the commas in the last sentence. If it had been me I probably would have omitted the comma after “closer,” but I sort of think Kushner’s version is better. Then I wonder: what about leaving the one after “closer” and adding another after “like”?
Hey, this is a good opportunity for a poll! I’ve never put one in here before, let’s give this new WordPress functionality a swing. (Non-standard comma used there on purpose, pedants.)